The Spoon
Like The Spoon dancing
acrobatics in the air
Refrain the cold Squirrel
diplomatic on the road
Release the Winter, perched
erratic on the year
Resist the Present, point
hermetic on the scale —
Dance.
And dance
With no mind as to
Why you started or when
Now and forever
Untroubled with the Fall,
The splintering of
Temporal aims and
Nomadic stalagmites —
Forming only because they were unformed
Unforming because they were formed
The ephemeral continuity of
One spoon dropping, only to be picked up
And then —
Again
Release.
This is beautiful! I love the strong voice; lines like “Refrain the cold squirrel” or “Release the Winter” are both assertive and inviting.
There are some other lines I really like to, especially “Forming only because they were unformed”. I think the line that comes after it could be stronger if it would be more direct, something like “Unforming because they were formed” — the un-so is a abstract and the repeated words would give a nice cadence I think.
Anyways, it’s a wonderful piece. Would love to hear you read it sometime!
Thank you Evan!
Your feedback is so appreciated.. And confirms some of my feelings about that last section!
PS. I love how easily writings are engaged with through this forum! <3